Words on Music (Part 2): your writing

Hello again!

How are you? Here is more of your great writing on music! Click on these links for the pieces of music here, here, here, and here. 

Here's the first piece of writing. What do you think of it? 

There was a man in somewhere. He was gentle and funny. One day, he went to one town. The town was fantastic and wonderful. And the man came across a woman. The woman is very beautiful. He fell in love, then he told to her. So they went to a café and they became friendly. But he loved her. When he came home, he thought “I have to say my mind to her.” And he said “I love you.” She was very surprised, but she said “Me too.” After nine months, they were married.

The woman lived 40 more years. He was very sad every day. The woman was very important person for him. He and she didn’t have a child. But they were very happy. So, he became alone.

One day, he had a dream. The dream was very happy. This was that they meet first. They were young and brilliant. He was crying and smiling during dreaming. When he waked up, he felt happiness. And he looked theirs album. All of pictures were full with happiness. He couldn’t stop tears. But he heard her voice “Sorry. But I want you to live a long time. Please, please.” Then he decided to live as much as possible. So after 10 years, he died silently and his face was very gentle and happy.

Wow! An incredible and moving ending. Here's another:

One day, there was a man of one. He is office worker in near big enterprise. He has worry and anxiety. He walking round the office, and he found the bar. There is the bar in near office. He went into the bar. The bar had a lot of people. For example, smoking man, woman drinking liquor, man to make a drink, and man playing the piano.

He sat in closer from the door, and he asked liquor. He heard the sound of the piano while drinking. He was moved by sound of the piano. His sound healed his heart. He was quiet listening to the worries and troubles. He went to this bar every day, and he heard the sound of the piano. He was overworked. So, he lost sight of own. But, he wanted to enjoy the life by his sound of the piano.

He has changed. He left the job, and he traveled. He went to a lot of country, and he met many people. He heard their experience. He lived for me until now. But, he is going to live for other people. He founded the company of volunteers, and he was success. He began to a new life by his sound of the piano.

Another incredible story! Let's read another:

A beautiful girl was in a beautiful place. There were a beautiful river, beautiful flowers, beautiful fruits, and a beautiful lake. It was the most wonderful and beautiful place in the world. However, there was nobody but her, and she had thought she had been all alone until she would be dead.

One day, a boy came into the place. He was an adventurer, so he had wanted to walk around the world. When he looked around the place, he was surprised. “What a beautiful view!” he said. As soon as the girl heard the voice, she ran to him, and they met each other for the first time. “What a beautiful girl.” he said. They looked at each other, and they fell in love. After that, they spent each loving day.

When they had their first kiss, an accident happened. Actually, she had a secret. If she would kiss someone, the one would be dead. They had never known the secret, so they kissed each other. Soon, he fell down right there, and she was into a panic. “What’s happened!” she screamed, but his eyes kept closing. She became all alone again.  

Now that was great! Let's see one more! 

When I came to I was in the silent forest. I don't know what brought me here. The big and tall trees surround me and they don't allow me to see the sky. I started walking to find the other creatures, but nothing was found by me. 

I wandered in the forest, but I don’t know how long I wandered. I felt I may get tired, so I decided to take a break. When I sat down on the ground, I heard any sound. I tried to find where the sound come from. It was a bird. It flied around me as if he invite me to somewhere. Therefore, I followed him. I think I walked so long distance, but I didn’t get tired. He brought me to the small space where is not surrounded by the trees.

When I came to I was in noisy station where I used to use to go to the university. I was surrounded by a lot of people. They were interested in nothing except themselves and they continued their walking. Then, I understood there are no change between the silent forest and the noisy station.

Another interesting story! Click on the page link to read more:

I’m crying. Because my friend and I quarreled yesterday. Today we intended to meet. Quarrel reason was trifling. I met hers boyfriend last week. I made this secret. However, it has come out yesterday. My friend was very angry. But I thought that I must be angry.  

Last week me and her boyfriend bought present for my friend. Because her birthday is next week. Her boyfriend didn’t understand hers present. So I helped to him. It was told him to make this a secret. He bought necklace and sweater. We looked forward to it. We thought that we wanted her to please. And we planned surprise. The surprise is he handed a present and propose before the situation. He was tense very much.

The surprise is today. But I will not meet my friend. I told this to him. He was apologetic. He cooperated to be reconciled. He called her. He let her reconcile with me at time of the surprise. My friend cried because she knew the truth. Therefore music played.  This music is use for him propose. A large number of people danced to music and sang. The people became the smile and happy. We danced happily, too. The music made all happy.

A beautiful day it was. Now check out this story:

A piano music is like a love. At first, the happiness comes. Sweet melody represents the happy time. I image that a couple’s relationship is deeper gradually and they will be happier. But the happiness doesn’t continue for a long time.

Next, the sadness comes. The music is slowly. It’s like a good-bye. It shows someone feels loneliness. Someone cries every night. He or she tries to disappear the memories. But he or she cannot forget easily. And they grow up.

Finally, they meet someone who will be a new lover. The music goes to a finale. It shows a happy end. The sadness is over. And the happiness comes again. Then the music will begin again. They repeat the happiness and the sadness alternately. This music is inside of them.

Fantastic! Now read this one. It's longer than the others, but quite moving. 

Her first memory was lake that she used to go when she was little with her grandpa. She remembered that he take her hand and walk to the lake, his hand had wrinkle and blot. He always gave her mint candy when they walk. He always smells like mint and cigarette.

He did not talk much but he often told his memory. He told many story but he liked to talk about his wife. His wife is her grandmother but she died when she was young so she had never met her. He said she was so beautiful and kind. He believe that she was most nice woman in this word. He still loved her although she died. She could tell it way he talk. When he told about his wife his eyes twinkled kindly. She liked to see them. She was little and did not know about love but she could feel love that is quiet but strong.

They used to sit bench that there was front of the lake. she remember in winter cold wind draw beautiful picture on the lake. Her leg could not touch ground when they sit the bench, so she swung her leg. Cold wind touched her face. Some boat flowed on the lake. His kindly voice always make her relieved. But when she was ten years old she and her mother moved another city. That city was far from her grandfather’s house then she could not see him as before. Sometimes, she visit him but not same as before and she too busy to make new friends in new school.

When she was 13 he died. At that time, she rarely saw him. He was important for her but her memory of him was dim but when she saw his white face in coffin, it remained her feeling that is she used to feel when she spend time with him. Then a music came to her heart. It was she used to listen with him. He had a music box that he gave his wife before they married. That was little but so beautiful. It had carved flower. She liked to see it. So, she looked it long time. While she saw the music box he told how to met grandmother. The story is beautiful and romantic. He showed her photo of her grandmother. She thought that in that photo grandmother look like princess, elegant and kind. She felt happy that her grandmother was so nice.

Grandpa said her grandmother is so beautiful angel of heaven and always see her and she remained that when she could not well some thing or sad until get used new life. She remembered his love. His love is always quiet but very very strong. He thought her that live honest as stubborn and keep love what you love is important without words.

Her memory of him is not clear as before but the fact that she spend time with him is never disappear if even she forget. She realized that sometimes, things has meaning if even you will forget it. The memory became one of her part. She felt so.

Now she is 27. She is an artist. When she start her work, she imaged wind draw beautiful picture the lake. Than she feel quiet but strong volition. 

A moving piece of writing that has a title - "Ripple on the Water." This person is a real writer! 

There are many great examples of your writing and these are some of the best. I've been proud and happy to have all of you as students and I hope to see you around at the university from April. Good luck, and all the best to you. 

Take care! 

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